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An echoing silence.
Haunts my bones,
I hate this feeling.
Of being alone.

An emptiness,
That I cannot fill.
I do not have the strength,
Nor the will.

What I've longed for,
Has gone and changed,
To form a monster,
One so strange.

I do hate,
What you have become.
You try and impress,
Everyone.

I hate myself,
For messing up,
One too many chances.
It's just my luck.

So I'll give up,
On thoughts I had.
It was just a trend,
A new found fad.

So many lies,
I'll fill my head.
Though it will haunt me,
Till I'm dead.

Even though I'm angry,
And though I am in pain.
It's not you,
Who I blame.

Being alone,
Is a pain I can't bear,
And though you're not who I want.
I still wish you were.
This is something that has been eating at me for ages, it's always there.
Sometimes other emotions will come and take its spot, but it's always there under my skin.
So when there's someone who that I've had feelings for, for a long time. Then the person changes, due to meeting new people who change him. So I realise that he isn't the same person, and I tell myself that he's not the one. It hurts, but it passes.
Then one day I'm sitting and he comes over, barely makes eye contact with me and I get a heavy feeling. That you miss it all, that feeling of butterflies when he's around the playful teases. Everything.
Now he's a different person, a stranger.
That's what hurts the most.
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:iconchristinehaggerty:
christinehaggerty Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013
I really like your rhythm, and you made a good use of the rhyme you had even though this is mostly free verse. Nice.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much
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AnimeVeteran Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Feels like this is happening to me right now. I'm watching it happen, and I may be in denial about it. Don't want to admit it, but I'd rather wait to face it when I absolutely have to.
Very well written, and a very clever conveyance of the feeling and emotion in this piece.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Since I've been there I hate the feeling though maybe you still have a chance to fix it. Me on the other hand waited to long to realise it was gone.
Thank you ver much.
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C-Allagash Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013
This is a wonderful piece, and as it already happened other times, I really can relate to what's written.

It's a real shame I haven't had much time to check your gallery as often as before, but this one visit (as expected) payed out.

Hope you're doing fine, and as always, it's a pleasure to read from you.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, it means a lot. :)

Oh it's ok, I hear the real world takes up a lot of time lol

I'm doing better, thanks :)
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Really interesting meter here, it was what caught my attention. One question: Did you mean for it to read "a pain I can't bare" as in, cannot reveal, or did you mean cannot carry? That would be "bear." But I like this piece, well done.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hum I suppose it is bear now that I think about it, thanks for drawing that to my attention.
Why thank you :)
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TheChesherCat Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No problem, glad to help.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:)
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i8magic Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013
This leaves me feeling wistful, thinking of my own lost chances or chances that never were. I normally don't get much out of verse, but this one just resonated with me. Well done.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad that you can connect with it, even if it did spark negative emotions, for that I'm sorry. But thank you :)
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S2DPro Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow. I understand that feeling. I hope you find happiness somehow. Just keep your chin up, keep hope. Without hope, we have nothing.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you understand. Me too, thank you I will try.
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S2DPro Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And if you need someone to talk to, I'm here. I know you don't know me, but I've had similar circumstances. It'll work out eventually.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thank you. :hug:
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Squeaky-Squishy Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013
I love this. Its very well written and sad.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, it hurts, but I feel better now that I got it out in the open.
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suzukoyan Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:hug:
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suzukoyan Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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suzukoyan Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:tighthug:
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suzukoyan Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Artisan Crafter
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
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sarahowen97 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
A beautiful poem, but so sad! I feel for you :hug:
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thank you :)
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
It always hurts when you realise that the people you love are not the people you thought they were, when they become something different. :hug:
Good poem, a couple of spelling errors, but the imagery is brilliant. :)
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah it's just been eating at me too much.

Where...?
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
Best advice you can get is to not dwell on it... though 'tis easier said than done.

1st stanza, 2nd line. Hunt should be hurt (or haunt)
And
7th stanza, 3rd line. Hunt should be haunt.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aye, though it's not something I can put to the side right now.

Okies
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
Aye, somethings are unavoidable... but try not to dwell on it when you don't have to. Find happier things to occupy your mind... like Spring! :D

:)
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, trying too, aw I'm being a wee sado today, all I can think is the bad things I needa stop.. Thinking.
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
Meditation... it works wonders :nod: Clear your mind, and focus it on the positives. I swear by it. :nod:
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Um idk if sitting in silence is what I need, I think I need to be hypnotised
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theshadow223 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
I can relate to all of what you are saying, and im sure there are many other people who could as well. Great work, and on a more personal level, keep your chin up. It'll pass eventually I promise, I know it sucks now but i promise there is always a light at the end of even the seemingly darkest tunnels.
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw thank you, I'll try, maybe now that I've got it off my chest it will help me a little more
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theshadow223 Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Student Writer
I hope so (:
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Feb 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:) me too
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