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As a child he watched, his heroes bask in glory,
Hoping that one day that would be his story.

All day and all night he worked himself to be the best,
Put his passion to the test.

Then one day he got a break,
A unknown fighter, against a flake.

With the dodge of a punch and the flick of the hand,
For the first time he was a winning man.

Notcied by a guy who looked like a bum,
Told he would train him, to be the one.

With the nod of a head and a shake of the hand,
Could there be a champion in this young man?

Blood, sweat and tears went hand in hand,
With new found titles, 'he's our man!'

He rose higher and higher on his winning streak,
But to the glitz and glamour  he became weak.

Lost in the glory that was his own,
feeling high on top of his throne.

But into the scene came a new kid in town,
Who took him on, and brought him down.

Down and out he had lost his fame,
So he turned to a bottle with no name.

And in a drunken rage he let rip on the town,
Caused him a lock up in old downtown.

Finally out sober and sorry, he looked at himself, and did not know the man he saw, a crazy drunk who thought he was above the law?

So on that day he made a change, to go back to his roots and stay that way.

He was gonna fight his way back to the top,
Hard work and faith to keep him up.

So one day again the world would see, the champion he was meant to be.
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Championby TheIndigoFeather

Literature / Poetry / Narrative / Free Verse©2012-2015 TheIndigoFeather
Just something random I wrote when I couldn't sleep last night, finshed around 12:45 last night. :s

I not really sure where this came from, but it's about boxer and his life. With the beginning, the ups and downs.

Hope you enjoy. :meow:

*This is a edit of the first upload, because I'm a hurp de durp who can't spell, or upload the right copy of her work.*
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Student Writer
This is good, a really strong narrative. :)
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Written when midnight was soo late for me, the amount of mistakes I made on this one was unreal though
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Student Writer
Haha you laugh at midnight now =P lol Aye, I spell check all of my work before uploading.... though some mistakes still get through :no:
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I laugh in its face XD I think I wrote it on my iPod like a durp
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Student Writer
Hahaha and in 3am's too XD Ah, I do all mine on my laptop
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yeah I'll be doing all nighters soon XD ah well I vary from what ever is closest at the time, I've been known to write on the note part of my phone
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EclecticQuill Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Student Writer
Woo! All nighters :dummy: I scribble stuff down on paper all the time, but very rarely use anything electronic other than my laptop
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
woohoo! Need more coffee though! aww I see 
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AmeliadosSantos Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like that. it's a whole story, with meaning and speechs and characters, but it's extremely short and all in verse (thank you, Captain Obvious, for pointing that out). I feel like this is your kind of thing and you're really good at it. nicely done!!
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, you really think? Ha I'm good at something for once! (look mom look!) lol
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AmeliadosSantos Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome. and of course I think so! I'm not a good liar anyway. lol
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha Sneeky ninja! Lol
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AmeliadosSantos Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
lol. but seriously, you are good at that. ("look, mum, look" LOL)
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
XD lolz
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TheLunarDragon Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
As I am a bit of a grammar Nazi, I will point out a few misspellings.

Line 6: Misspelled "fighter" and "against"

Line 8: Misspelled "winner" (missing the extra 'n')

Line 9: Misspelled "noticed"

Line 15: Should be "rose higher" not "rise higher"

Line 16: Misspelled "glamour"

Line 25: Should be "himself" not "hisself"

Last line: Misspelled "meant"

Otherwise a great poem with a great story. I just suggest you proofread your poetry :)
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TheIndigoFeather Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Aw crap I did change them all and I must have uploaded the other copy! *plam face*
I need to re change them again -does walk of shame- thanks for pointing that out ^^"
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TheLunarDragon Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Is all gravy! :P
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